assignment#11A

“Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.”


"A woman named shizue Masugi now visited Hiroshima from Tokyo. She had led a wildly unconventional life for Japanese women for her time. A journalist, married and divorced while young, she had later been the mistress, in turn, of two famous novelists and, later still, had married again. She had written short stories about the bitter love and bitter solitude of women and was now writing a column for lovelorn women in the big Tokyo newspaper Yomiuri Shimbu. She would become a catholic before she died, but she would choose to be buried in the Yokeiji temple, a Zen center founded in 1285 by a monk who felt sorry for women with cruel husbands and decreed that ant of them who took asylum in his temple as nuns could consider themselves divorced. On her trip to Hiroshima, she asked Kiyoshi Tanimoto what most needed to be done for women who were hibakusha. He suggested plastic surgery for the keloid girls. She started a campaign for funds in the yomiuri, and soon nine girls were taken to Tokyo for surgery. Later, twelve more were taken to Osaka. Newspapers called them, to their chagrin, Genbaku Otome, a phrase that was translated into English, literally, as A-Bomb Maidens."
page#(141-142)